I am studying in community college, and want to apply to transfer to University of Washington--Seattle. So my personal statement is very important. The deadline of Application is February 15, so please try your best to help me with that as soon as possible. Thank you very much!
My major is business. For this personal statement, it should cover all of the following information. I think you can focus on talking about my major (why & what did I do to achieve my dream). Maybe don’t write too much about my volunteer program, because the other prompt of UW needs that.
Topic: A. Academic Elements (required)
• Academic History
• Tell us about your college career to date, describing your performance, educational path and choices.
• Explain any situations that may have had a significant positive or negative impact on your academic progress and/or curricular choices. If you transferred multiple times, had a significant break in your education, or changed career paths, explain.
• What are the specific reasons you wish to leave your most recent college/university and/or program of study?
• Your Major and/or Career Goals
• Tell us about your intended major and career aspirations.
• Are you prepared to enter your intended major at this time? If not, describe your plans for preparing for the major. What led you to choose this major? If you are still undecided, why? What type of career are you most likely to pursue after finishing your education?
• How will the UW help you attain your academic, career, and/or personal goals?
• 750-1000 words
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The following 3 prompts are my personal statements for University of California and University of Wisconsin--Madison. And I will upload a list of my awards/activity; you can add something from that. Please use that information to complete the topic for UW. This topic requires you to know UW very well, so you must do some research of UW. Please connect my characteristics to UW.
If the information in those 3 prompts are useless or not enough, contact me immediately as the deadline is close, and then we can figure out a solution. Tell me if you need any extra information; I can send you a list of my awards/activity if you need.
In American admission officers’ perspective, make the personal statement more attractive and stronger to them. Please try your best; I hope my personal statement is “perfect”!
Prompt 1:
When I was growing up, my parents placed their dreams in a small company. Though they worked very hard, the success and long-term payoff they were looking for never came. After two years, the company failed due to their lack of experience with marketing strategies, financial planning, and other integral aspects in the operations of a business. Dejected, my parents vowed never to try managing a company again; what they didn't know is that they had ignited within me a passion for business economics.
Wanting to find an outlet for this passion that also made a difference in my community, I decided to build a charity while I was in high school, called "Brighten the Unfortunate." At first, my parents' experience gave me doubts about managing a project, albeit a non-profit one, but my experience volunteering for various organizations gave me the confidence to get the charity off the ground. Its goal was to provide aid and support for elderly people with no sources of income, social security, or care from relatives or friends. It was challenging to lead a team, work out logistics, and acquire funding, especially under the circumstance of Red Cross corruption scandal, which made many Chinese wary about charities. Sincerity and results won in the end, and we earned their trust. Our various activities had even received exposure from newspapers and news stations several times, significantly enhanced public awareness. I am so proud that Brighten the Unfortunate is a stable organization now that boasts more 100 members. Though helping people is its own reward, the experience helped me gain invaluable knowledge regarding managing an organization. The success of the project also gave me confidence in someday fulfilling the dream my parents and I share.
I didn't stop my pace on the way of pursuing my dream, I got the opportunity to work as an intern with an American company called "Simplyshe," a market leader in pet lifestyle products. I worked with trading contracts between Simplyshe and Chinese companies because of my Chinese language advantage. This internship gave me hands-on experience as I learned to work with statistics, to organize goods and materials, and about market value and other concepts like supply and demand. This real experience in the field confirmed for me the idea that this is where I belong.
More confident, I then augmented my experience with another internship this summer, this time for one of the biggest companies in China, Yuexiu Estate Company, where I worked in both the planning and financial management departments. At the time, there was a large estate project nearing completion and, fortunately, the manager had me participate in the planning and promotion stages. The negotiations with foreign companies alongside my general manager helped improve my negotiation and presentation abilities. This is just another step in my goal to succeed in business by learning every aspect from the ground up.
With this is mind, although I have had hands-on experience, I do not want to fall into the same trap as my parents in disregarding theory for application. Studying in America, I learned about economics, and the various fields which all play a part in the shaping of a business. It is this technical knowledge that I know will give me an edge in my career. Thus, University of California, a leading force in the field of economics, is essential to the achievement of my dreams. Armed with my real world experience, passion to succeed, and ability to apply logic and creativity to every obstacle, I look forward to the challenges that UC will offer.
Prompt 2:
"The archest enemy is the lack of firm faith" --When I tried to determine what it is that makes me always achieve excellence in every endeavor, recalling this quote gave me my answer: perseverance.
I think that the best way this has been exemplified in my life is my lifelong passion for ballet dancing. Ballet training is extremely strenuous, especially for someone as young as I was when I started. However, every time I was exhausted, I persevered in training. Every time my legs and waist strained constantly and I suffered from pain, I persevered in training. Every time my feet were rubbed bloody by pointe shoes, I persevered in training. No matter what difficulties I encountered, giving up was never an option, because compared with the pleasure the platform brings to me, all the pain is worth suffering. Even now, 15 years since my first tutu, I still practice as hard. More importantly, by learning to persevere with training, I have come to apply this trait of perseverance in every other aspect of my life.
Because of my hard work, I was admitted into one of the best dance teams in China, and even served as team captain. During this time, I won a number of first prize awards in national competitions and eventually gained national recognition. In 2008, as I represented China, I was invited to the Louisville performance center in America for performance exchange. I will always look back on this as one of the stepping stones that have informed my later decisions in life. Though it was the first time I set foot on American land, I was awarded honorary citizenship because of my outstanding performance. This led me to become deeply attracted by American culture, laying a solid foundation for my dream of studying in America.
I know the meaning of hard work more than most others. Once I have set a goal, I attempt to achieve it with 200 percent effort. I strive for excellence and never give up until I succeed. I know what it feels like to feel like I reached my limit, and push on anyway. Moreover, while I know that I am not a genius, I have proven over and over again that persistence and industriousness, if guided by informed decisions, really do pay off in the end. This is the attitude that I plan on taking with me to UC.
Prompt 3:
"The archest enemy is the lack of firm faith" --When I tried to determine what often goes unnoticed in me, recalling this quote gave me my answer: my perseverance. Most people see how easy-going I can be and the things I have accomplished in my life, and they think that I have been born under a lucky star or am just naturally talented. What they do not know is that I learned from an early age that the true measure of success is not only IQ or natural talent, but grit.
I think that the best way this has been exemplified in my life is my lifelong passion for ballet dancing. Ballet training is extremely strenuous, especially for someone as young as I was when I started. However, every time I was exhausted, I persevered in training. Every time my legs and waist strained constantly and I suffered from pain, I persevered in training. Every time my feet were rubbed bloody by pointe shoes, I persevered in training. No matter what difficulties I encountered, giving up was never an option, because compared with the pleasure of the platform, all the pain is worth suffering. My hard work allowed me to serve as team captain to one of the best dance teams in China and win national competitions. In 2008, I was even invited to the Louisville Performance Center in America for performance exchange. Those who saw the smiling, graceful figure on the stage never knew how many grueling hours went into perfecting even such a short routine. I think this trait has gone unnoticed in me because my ballet training has taught me to make my successes look as effortless as possible.
Another instance which tested this trait was when I decided to build a charity while I was in high school, called "Brighten the Unfortunate." Its goal was to provide aid and support for elderly people with no sources of income, social security, or care from relatives or friends. Just getting it off the ground was a monumental task. It was challenging to lead a team, work out logistics, and acquire funding, especially under the circumstance of Red Cross corruption scandal, which made many Chinese wary about charities. Sincerity and results won in the end, and we eventually earned their trust. Brighten the Unfortunate is now a stable organization now that boasts more 100 members, showing none of the uncertainty of its beginnings.
So many people come to believe that becoming recognized in a field, whether it is ballet or economics, means that you were simply born with a knack for it. From my experience, this could not be farther from the truth. What you are born with, if anything, is a passion for it, a passion so strong that you will push yourself to your limits and conquer every obstacle to achieve your goals. My smiles might come easily, but underneath is an ironclad will which knows the value of persistence and industriousness, draped in grace under pressure.
